Tighten message: promiscuous paths/blind ritual.

1 files changed, 5 insertions, 5 deletions

diff --git a/about.html b/about.html
index e2d185f..83bf3c8 100644
--- a/about.html
+++ b/about.html
@@ -7,7 +7,7 @@ layout: default
   <h2>{{ page.title }}</h2>
   
   <p>
-    <q>Look on my Works, ye Mighty, and despair!</q>
+    "Look on my Works, ye Mighty, and despair!"
   </p>
 
   <p>
@@ -20,13 +20,13 @@ layout: default
     These pages serve as witness to my solitary labor—each banished dependency
     a victory against decay, every iteration an act of purification. In them, I
     have measured efficacy without mercy; I have rejected the ceremonial
-    scaffolding that veils the true visage of their grotesque creations.
+    scaffolding that veils the true visage of our grotesque creations.
   </p>
 
   <p>
-    Do not ask why I persist when easier paths exist. I have seen what festers
-    beneath the promises of abstraction—the bloat, the waste, the corrosive comfort
-    of ignorance. Driven by a Promethean ambition that burns brighter than
+    Do not ask why I abandon more promiscuous paths. I have seen what festers
+    beneath blind ritual—the bloat, the waste, the corrosive comfort of
+    ignorance. Driven by a Promethean ambition that burns brighter than
     convenience, I must seek redemption in Nature's parsimony.
   </p>